The Baltimore City Correctional Center (BCCC) houses about 4,000 Baltimore residents on the average day, making it one of the largest jails in the United States. More than half of BCCC’s population is incarcerated on a non-violent offense, and the majority of these men and women have served time in the past or will return on a similar charge. Some believe that the problem of recidivism is a reflection of the need for harsher consequences and longer sentences. However, statistics reveal that men and women incarcerated on non-violent charges are 50% more likely to return to jail on a repeat offense than those who complete an alternative correctional program. Through analysis of academic literature and ethnographic study methods, this study outlines the successes and shortcomings of Baltimore’s correctional system, identifies alternative methods that have succeeded in other urban jails, and proposes a theoretical alternative program that could reduce recidivism, cut down on crime, and improve the lives of Baltimore’s citizens.
I think you should provide more detail about how alternative programs would improve the lives of Baltimore's citizens.
ReplyDeleteI LOVE the way you began with a startling fact. It really catches the reader's attention. Good idea!
ReplyDeleteOh snap, reading this made me want to rework mine immediately. I'm impressed. It's very clean, objective, and concise.
ReplyDeleteThe use of quantitative data showed signs of scientific objectivity towards your topic. And indicates that this paper is a scholarly publication rather than an op ed piece.
Also liked the "less is more" approach. Really good
Great topic. I love how thorough you are. The statistics is a good way to back up information. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteI think this is very informative. The use of statistics are very good in giving information. My only suggestion would be to add a little more info to provide some more context.
ReplyDeletedo the types of alternative programs effect the probability of recidivism? Your paper could be very helpful for people to understand changes that need to be made to correct this.
ReplyDeleteExcellent use of statistics! It really helps the reader sense the importance of your topic. Concise and to the point, great abstract.
ReplyDeletevery clear and precise abstract! easy to follow and the context was interesting and helpful.
ReplyDeleteThe statistics really give this abstract a sense of purpose and uniqueness. They grab the audiences attention right from the start. Good Job.
ReplyDeleteThe use of statistics grabs the readers attention and shoves in their face WHY this is an important topic to research and why they should read what you write. Great job! Maybe your information could cause changes to the correctional system.
ReplyDeleteClear and Precise, even though it was short you captured my attention enough to want to see the rest of the research. Your thesis statement is quite long maybe you could make it a little more concise.
ReplyDeleteI really like the use of numbers at the beginning to give the hard facts of your topic. I think this has come a long way since the beginning of the semester...good work!
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